Journal -3, 31/01/2025

Corrections & Explanations:

1. "I went to some place" → "I went somewhere"
   • "Some place" is grammatically correct but sounds unnatural. "Somewhere" is more natural in this context.
2. "I went to Alonim canyon" → "I went to Alonim Canyon"
   • Proper nouns (names of places) should be capitalized.
3. "Discovered that a book store is closed" → "Discovered that the bookstore was closed"
   • "A bookstore" suggests any random bookstore, but since you're referring to a specific one, "the bookstore" is better.
   • "Is closed" refers to the present, but the event happened in the past, so "was closed" is correct.
4. "They have no book store there anymore" → "They don’t have a bookstore there anymore"
   • "They have no bookstore" is unnatural. Instead, use "They don’t have a bookstore anymore."
   • "Bookstore" is commonly written as one word.
5. "The weather was nice, shiny" → "The weather was nice and sunny"
   • "Shiny" is not used to describe weather. "Sunny" is the correct word.
6. "I play on the piano for a while" → "I played the piano for a while"
   • "Play" should be in past tense ("played") to match the rest of the story.
   • We say "play the piano", not "play on the piano."
7. "Wanted to go with my dog for a walk" → "Wanted to take my dog for a walk"
   • "Go with my dog for a walk" is unnatural. "Take my dog for a walk" is the common phrase.
8. "So, I eat and in the end I went with the dog after dinner later than I expected."
   • "Eat" should be in past tense ("ate") to match the past events.
   • "In the end" sounds unnatural here. "Eventually" is a better alternative.
   • "With the dog" → "With my dog" is more natural.
9. "So, we came home quite late and I was quite tired."
   • This is correct but could be made smoother in phrasing.
10. "As a result I started to learn English much later than I expected."

• "Started to learn English" → "Started learning English" is more natural in this context.

B2 Version:

Today was another busy Friday. I went somewhere, and on my way home, I stopped by Alonim Canyon. I found out that the bookstore there had closed—they don’t have one anymore. The weather was nice and sunny.

I played the piano for a while and wanted to take my dog for a walk, but suddenly, it started raining. So, I ate dinner, and eventually, I took my dog out for a walk later than I had planned. We got home quite late, and I was really tired. As a result, I started learning English much later than I expected.

Conversational C1 Version:

Today was another busy Friday. On my way home, I stopped by Alonim Canyon and realized the bookstore had shut down—they don’t have one there anymore. The weather was great—warm and sunny.

I played the piano for a bit and was about to take my dog out for a walk when it suddenly started raining. So, I had dinner first, and eventually, I took her out later than I’d planned. By the time we got home, it was pretty late, and I was exhausted. That meant I didn’t get around to studying English until much later than I wanted to.

Key Differences Between B2 and C1:

• The B2 version uses clear, structured sentences with correct grammar.
• The C1 version is smoother and more conversational, using contractions ("I’d planned") and more natural phrasing ("That meant I didn’t get around to studying English...").